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HopeHoops

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1. Okay, you do need to make a major revision.

Reply to ddickey (Original post)

Sat Jan 7, 2012, 10:54 AM

Jan 2012

Disclaimer: I have degrees in both mathematics and philosophy.

If you want your essay to be taken seriously, you'll have to revise it to use more appropriate language. "Shithouse" and "bullshit" don't fly in the academic realm and both are used in your first paragraph. While that's definitely accepted language on sites like DU, it detracts from the intended serious nature of your discussion. The general flow is good, but revise it and let me know when you've done so and I'll give it another read.

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Seeking comments and criticisms [View all] ddickey Jan 2012 OP

Okay, you do need to make a major revision. HopeHoops Jan 2012 #1

Revised ddickey Jan 2012 #2

It is not reasonable to expect people to take things on faith, only to ask that they do. HopeHoops Jan 2012 #3

Okay, a few comments (in body of message) HopeHoops Jan 2012 #4

A quick response ddickey Jan 2012 #5

Feel free to harass and pick. And you're speaking to the MASTER of rambling! HopeHoops Jan 2012 #6

Taking you up on your offer ddickey Jan 2012 #8

Quite well done. Nice argument and cleanly presented. HopeHoops Jan 2012 #9

+1 dem644555il Mar 2012 #15

About your degrees ddickey Jan 2012 #11

Disagree strongly. Are you trying to write a term paper? If so, axe the profanity. McCamy Taylor Mar 2012 #12

Posted a new essay ddickey Jan 2012 #7

Essay about Afghanistan ddickey Jan 2012 #10

An interesting read... Fearless Mar 2012 #13

Thanks for the comments ddickey Mar 2012 #14

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